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Here I was thinking that it would be ok
Trying my best not to remember that day
Trying my best to get you back mine
Heart is weak but I trick it into lying
That it’s all good I don’t need her
So cold 10 degrees under burr
All this time you was my down fall
You were playing but I must admit I gave it my all
I hate the fact that I love you after all this
Just thinking about the day we first kiss
And who am I to speak on the past
I should have listen when you said it wouldn’t last
But I was blind I thought you felt the same way
The only girl I talk to outside my mother yep every day
But you said it wouldn’t last
Watching are future pour out the glass
"watching are" should be "watching our"
I don't think you need to add the word "yep" in after "everyday"
"first kiss" needs to be past tense and change to "first kissed"
"you was my downfall" change to "you were my downfall"
Watch out for some grammatical errors and I think you'll be alright
I'll give you a 5 out of 10
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